Services to Writers

Emily Gillatt-Ball has a fridge magnet which reads, ‘Everyone is entitled to my opinion,’ and she means it!

All requests for beta-reading, editorial advice or other writing services will be treated as confidential and your work will not be shown to or discussed with any other person.

Contact Emily for further information. Be careful what you wish for.

THE CRITIQUE    by Emily Gillatt-Ball

First, many thanks for showing me your novel
Of course, it’s just a draft one at this stage
But still, it is a marvellous achievement
To get the story out and on the page

I’m flattered that you’ve asked for my opinion
I've given it some well-considered thought
You know it's simply vital to be candid
Or you won’t get the guidance that you’ve sought 

I have to say, your style is dull and worthy
Which gives your story quite a dreary start
You’ve shovelled in your adverbs like confetti
Though less is more is crucial to our art

Your characters are mostly unconvincing
The dialogue is often, frankly, crap
The hero is derivative and boring
The heroine deserves a major slap

The setting isn’t clear in your descriptions
And is there even meant to be a plot?
I have a problem with the final sentence
It really should be taken out – and shot!

I’ve marked the problems with your punctuation
And sentences that simply don’t make sense
And all the words you didn’t spell correctly
Along with faults in past and present tense

Well, anyway, I hope you’re not offended
I have to say, you’re looking somewhat sad
Despite these minor faults and criticisms
To tell the truth, it wasn’t all that bad

And if you need some feedback in the future
Be sure to get in touch and tell me then
Encouragement is vital for us writers
So do feel free to ask my help again!